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Thursday, May 30, 2013

#GBE2: No Comfort in My Fictional World

Although impoverished, fifteen-year-old Ben enjoys his loving mother, good friends, and the comfort of his rundown home; however, his world topples when a balding weirdo storms into his apartment, shoots his mom, and kidnaps him. He rides five hours up a rain-slicked highway to a lush mansion with sculptured bushes, the scent of blossoms from the yard, and historic paintings each overhung by a fancy light.

Although his new home says, "Enjoy comfort," Ben carries anger toward a mob father who is as cold as his apartment the day the heater broke. When Ben's temper flares, he strikes the villain and then finds himself pinned to wooden paneling while being whipped. 

From then on, Ben obeys with a passive aggression until he is tricked into performing a horrendous deed. He escapes into adventures that only a few of my friends know about because no agent has been willing to read my manuscript. Comfort is a foreign concept for my book characters.


23 comments:

Talya Tate Boerner said...

sounds like a page turner to me!

Masshole Mommy said...

Sounds like a good read to me....

Joyce Lansky said...

A friend told me my manuscript kept her up all night because she was so worried about Ben; however, that's not what agents want to hear in a query letter. It's a roller coaster ride, indeed, but no one with the power to make dreams come true has bothered to buckle a seat belt. My son has a friend who just started a new job at a closed house. I hope one day she'll read it on her own. Connections are everything! Thanks for your input.

Kittie Howard said...

Wow, talk about an adrenaline rush!

Charleen said...

Unique. Not like every plot out there. That is admirable.

Kim Turner said...

Reeled me in with that little snippet! Keep sending it out!!!

Mandi Roach said...

Hi there! Visiting you from the Thumpin’ Thursday Blog Hop!

XOXO, Mandi @ All My Happy Endings

stevebethere said...

I was getting into that especially after the whipping bit LOL

Have a funtastic day ;-)

mindlovemisery said...

That is a book I would read =) Fantastic!

Leovi said...

Yes, Ben is a thrilling and disturbing character!

Debbie said...

Absolutely riveting! Hope you have success with it in the end.

Jennifer Wilck said...

Sounds fabulous to me! Good luck with it.

Misha Gericke said...

Sounds like your book has the makings for something amazing. Hope you find the right agent and/or editor for it. :-)

Robyn Greenhouse said...

Keep trying! Just this little bit I've read, sounds like the beginning of a great story!!

Brenda Stevens said...

dang!!!!

Talya Tate Boerner said...

Yes connections are everything. Same for every profession I suppose.

The Real Cie said...

Sounds very compelling. Thank you so much for your visit to the Sea of Fit Fat Mermaids!

Lisa Newlin said...

I appreciate the detail of the wooden paneling. :-)

mail4rosey said...

Sounds like Hollywood to me. Look for a Hollywood agent (you know the old saying, 'shoot for the moon, if you fail you'll land among the stars). :)

Wishing you speed in finding the perfect publisher for your work!

Joyce Lansky said...

I actually hadn't queried this manuscript since 2010, until yesterday. I've written three novels since BEING BOMPSY CARLEFFA; however, this one is my favorite, and I keep coming back to it. I always thought it would be my breakout novel, but after so much rejection, I had moved on to something else.

Mrsupole said...

I think you should never give up on your dream. I think there are many famous books in print that took the author years before they found someone willing to publish it. Are there people that actively go out and search for a publisher for an author, something like a manager? I am not sure if you get one before you are published or after. It seems obvious that you will get one after because everyone wants a piece of the pie.

I really liked the short snippet that you shared with us and it seems like it would be a nice read. I hope someone who knows someone who knows a publisher will read this and work towards getting it published.

Happy Theme Thursday and am sending you lots of luck to get it published. Hope you have a nice start to your vacation and find some time to dream big dreams.

God bless.

Suzy said...

Good luck with your book.

Suzy http://bit.ly/12XCUcO

Susan ~ Today's Working Woman said...

Ok...I'm hooked! Where's the rest of the story?

Susan Dusterhoft
Today's Working Woman
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