tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post4842505065066681799..comments2024-02-14T07:56:14.284-06:00Comments on Catch My Words: Weekend Writing Warriors 8/31/14Catch My Wordshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06338761214938263819noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-33347561973289532002014-09-03T13:33:09.848-05:002014-09-03T13:33:09.848-05:00Loving the back and forth; it's realistic dial...Loving the back and forth; it's realistic dialogue you'd hear in the hallways of a school. Oh man, I HATE bullies. I like your character already for attempting to help Austin. Can't wait to read what's in store next!<br /><br />Keep smiling,<br />YawattaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-49793354512675773512014-09-01T20:55:57.713-05:002014-09-01T20:55:57.713-05:00oooh, it's escalating. darn bullies!oooh, it's escalating. darn bullies!LA Botcharhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09045857399816360885noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-34136657842397650152014-09-01T11:07:56.861-05:002014-09-01T11:07:56.861-05:00blackheads surrounding a red splotch on Bryson’s c...blackheads surrounding a red splotch on Bryson’s cheek.---ewwww great visual there!<br /><br />I liked that he stepped up to help his friend even at possible risk of becoming a target himself.Meka Jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04592225193233705022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-17509164849454629172014-09-01T06:09:28.962-05:002014-09-01T06:09:28.962-05:00Sounds like an accurate portrayal of high school h...Sounds like an accurate portrayal of high school hallways. ;)mail4roseyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17850985344834209198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-22240913570836046222014-08-31T23:11:25.082-05:002014-08-31T23:11:25.082-05:00Good observation of details, and glad to see someo...Good observation of details, and glad to see someone standing up to bullies. Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-10114257781523378412014-08-31T22:46:31.268-05:002014-08-31T22:46:31.268-05:00Well, he's a bit repulsive. Tall and wide bull...Well, he's a bit repulsive. Tall and wide bully, not a good deal for the skinny little guy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-28657221714985790072014-08-31T20:14:59.417-05:002014-08-31T20:14:59.417-05:00SO realistic. And detailed, as others have said. A...SO realistic. And detailed, as others have said. An effective excerpt to tell us about the characters!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-32192383601523455452014-08-31T17:18:18.888-05:002014-08-31T17:18:18.888-05:00He sounds like a good friend already.He sounds like a good friend already.messymimihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10649529601786689712noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-47448884060749624192014-08-31T17:01:52.607-05:002014-08-31T17:01:52.607-05:00I liked it, though I'd make one small change: ...I liked it, though I'd make one small change: I'd make "Again." its own sentence.Binkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15679506953039078735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-36165495410442686172014-08-31T15:02:03.515-05:002014-08-31T15:02:03.515-05:00I'm glad someone is standing up to the bully.I'm glad someone is standing up to the bully.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-4091691223442829032014-08-31T13:10:08.437-05:002014-08-31T13:10:08.437-05:00Very real dialogue, and great descriptive writing....Very real dialogue, and great descriptive writing. Nicely done, Joyce!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-89155024182275474442014-08-31T12:10:36.801-05:002014-08-31T12:10:36.801-05:00Nice conflict.
Juneta at Writer's GambitNice conflict. <br />Juneta at <a href="http://junetakey.com/" rel="nofollow">Writer's Gambit</a><br />Juneta keyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08815758043024184034noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-3005749365399080422014-08-31T10:26:09.175-05:002014-08-31T10:26:09.175-05:00Love the details throughout, like the pant leg ref...Love the details throughout, like the pant leg reference, and the blackheads, etc. The dialogue is great too. Well done, Joyce! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13436620421781059000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-28327362827613097752014-08-31T08:39:25.041-05:002014-08-31T08:39:25.041-05:00This is the same story. He's seen the guy outs...This is the same story. He's seen the guy outside and is ready to get out of there. Thanks for the comments.Catch My Wordshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06338761214938263819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-14396226039320201682014-08-31T07:54:50.670-05:002014-08-31T07:54:50.670-05:00Darn those bullies. Seems like a scene that's...Darn those bullies. Seems like a scene that's played out many a time in schools all over.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8063731082086337074.post-46611920012981070182014-08-31T01:08:34.009-05:002014-08-31T01:08:34.009-05:00I wasn't sure if this was connected to any of ...I wasn't sure if this was connected to any of the previous ones? This was a great snippet :D Just enough detail to make it interesting. I actually don't have any concrit this week XD Bryson sounds like a bully :/ I was bullied in middle school/high school but with girls it's generally not physical. I'm not sure of the protagonist's name here, but I'm glad he stood up to the bully for his friend. That's much easier said than done ;) I like him/her already ^^ Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com