Although impoverished, fifteen-year-old Ben enjoys his loving mother, good friends, and the comfort of his rundown home; however, his world topples when a balding weirdo storms into his apartment, shoots his mom, and kidnaps him. He rides five hours up a rain-slicked highway to a lush mansion with sculptured bushes, the scent of blossoms from the yard, and historic paintings each overhung by a fancy light.
Although his new home says, "Enjoy comfort," Ben carries anger toward a mob father who is as cold as his apartment the day the heater broke. When Ben's temper flares, he strikes the villain and then finds himself pinned to wooden paneling while being whipped.
sounds like a page turner to me!
ReplyDeleteA friend told me my manuscript kept her up all night because she was so worried about Ben; however, that's not what agents want to hear in a query letter. It's a roller coaster ride, indeed, but no one with the power to make dreams come true has bothered to buckle a seat belt. My son has a friend who just started a new job at a closed house. I hope one day she'll read it on her own. Connections are everything! Thanks for your input.
DeleteYes connections are everything. Same for every profession I suppose.
DeleteSounds like a good read to me....
ReplyDeleteWow, talk about an adrenaline rush!
ReplyDeleteUnique. Not like every plot out there. That is admirable.
ReplyDeleteReeled me in with that little snippet! Keep sending it out!!!
ReplyDeleteI was getting into that especially after the whipping bit LOL
ReplyDeleteHave a funtastic day ;-)
That is a book I would read =) Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteYes, Ben is a thrilling and disturbing character!
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely riveting! Hope you have success with it in the end.
ReplyDeleteSounds fabulous to me! Good luck with it.
ReplyDeleteSounds like your book has the makings for something amazing. Hope you find the right agent and/or editor for it. :-)
ReplyDeleteKeep trying! Just this little bit I've read, sounds like the beginning of a great story!!
ReplyDeletedang!!!!
ReplyDeleteSounds very compelling. Thank you so much for your visit to the Sea of Fit Fat Mermaids!
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the detail of the wooden paneling. :-)
ReplyDeleteSounds like Hollywood to me. Look for a Hollywood agent (you know the old saying, 'shoot for the moon, if you fail you'll land among the stars). :)
ReplyDeleteWishing you speed in finding the perfect publisher for your work!
I actually hadn't queried this manuscript since 2010, until yesterday. I've written three novels since BEING BOMPSY CARLEFFA; however, this one is my favorite, and I keep coming back to it. I always thought it would be my breakout novel, but after so much rejection, I had moved on to something else.
ReplyDeleteI think you should never give up on your dream. I think there are many famous books in print that took the author years before they found someone willing to publish it. Are there people that actively go out and search for a publisher for an author, something like a manager? I am not sure if you get one before you are published or after. It seems obvious that you will get one after because everyone wants a piece of the pie.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the short snippet that you shared with us and it seems like it would be a nice read. I hope someone who knows someone who knows a publisher will read this and work towards getting it published.
Happy Theme Thursday and am sending you lots of luck to get it published. Hope you have a nice start to your vacation and find some time to dream big dreams.
God bless.
Good luck with your book.
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Ok...I'm hooked! Where's the rest of the story?
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