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Thursday, September 29, 2011

Writer's Post: The Road Block to Donuts

Here I am once again facing my biggest road block when I should be working on Mrs. Zimmerman's Donuts. Will, my ten year old character, wants to be invited to the weekly donut party at Harrison Zimmerman's house, but to get an invite, he must be part of the in-crowd. For a kid like Wimpy Will, this could happen–like never.

But life changes when along comes Slater, a clever fifth grader with a pointy Mohawk on top of his rounded head. Slater is eager to teach Will how to transform into Knob, the cool tough soldier; but in order to succeed, Will must pass several tests.

He certainly could do this if I'd spend more time on the novel and less time on the blog! So what do you think is my biggest road block?

Below is my opening couple of paragraphs. The first draft manuscript is almost totally complete, but it feels like a young dog: bony and lanky. I need to go back and add some meat.


Mrs. Zimmerman's Donuts
by
Yours Truly


            Every Friday after school, Harrison Zimmerman invited popular boys over for a stupid end-of-the-week celebration. His mom would fry up homemade donuts dipped in thick chocolate sauce. My mouth watered as we passed his house and I breathed in the scent of those gooey pieces of dough.   
Mom usually fell into a tantrum at the thought of me swallowing anything slightly junky. She fussed over eating healthy as if my gut would explode if the tiniest bit of sugar or grease tickled my insides. But the real reason I’d never eaten the donuts: Harrison had never invited me. Actually, no one had ever asked me to go anywhere.
Things were about to change.… if my author will get off the internet already. I'm a desperate boy in need of serious help! ARGGGHHH!
 

7 comments:

Jenn said...

Great intro!! And a great take on Road Block!

TSuttles Designs said...

This is great! I can't wait to read the finished product!

unikorna said...

Lovely fragment t reminded me a bit of Tom Sawyer, I think I read this book 25 times when I was a little girl. It is such a pleasure meeting you...thank you and kisses.

Rhonda Albom said...

LOL - ok, here is a completely selfish comment - I enjoy your blog, so sorry Will, you will just have to wait a little longer for a greasy doughnut. By the way, great intro . . .

Nicole Pyles said...

I love this beginning! We can all relate to not being invited to parties and such. Ah, so much so!

Finding the time to blog is so tough when you are tryin to write also! Good luck!

Catch My Words said...

Thanks for all the comments. I also work 50+ hours a week.

Unknown said...

Great beginning and take on road block!

Kathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com/