As part of Six Sentence Sunday, http://www.sixsunday.blogspot.com, I've been challenged to post six lines of writing today. These six lines are from my unpublished novel, Being Bompsy Carleffa. Ben and Fiso, the crime boss father who Ben had just met, have a bit of a communication breakdown at the dinner table. I've edited my work from its original version to fit the six sentence challenge.
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After Gil placed a tomato-base soup in front of each of us, I blew on the spoon and took a sip of cold liquid. All this money, and these people couldn’t heat the food.
“Do you like the gazpacho?” Fiso asked.
I dropped my spoon on the table and wondered why he'd mention the Gestapo? What was he, a modern day Nazi? Sick; this guy’s really sick!
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24 comments:
you weren't kidding - humourous is right ! I love gazpacho ! but yeah, some people don't get cold soup - great in the summer - and the word is similar to gestopo lol - I will definately look for more !
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Great six. Terrific visual. I can picture the whole scene.
Too funny! Love this character's voice. Great snippet.
Funny. I love the caustic wit. My kind of writing.
ROFL! I can 'see' the whole scene. Great job with this six!
LOL..."eat your gestapo." Which I love, by the way, but that and vichyssoise always gives people pause the first time. Funny six!
I'm with this guy. I'm not a cold soup fan either. Funny!
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ROFL. Those are fantastic. Love the interplay
hahaha this is great. Thanks for the smile.
Fun six! Not a cold soup fan either, unless it's a dessert soup.
Nice six. What a misunderstanding!
Now THAT is funny!
Ingriguing! I'd love to hear the rest of the conversation :) Great six!
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Very funny. :) I wonder what that person has to hide that they're worried about the Gestapo?
Too funny! He sounds like his misinterpretations will get him into a whole lotta hot water at some point!
This sounds fun as well as fun to write! Welcome!
Thanks for stopping by. Ben had been kidnapped by a father who he thought was dead, and Dad's men roughed the teen up a bit after he showed disrespect. During the kidnapping, his uncle shot his mom, and he learned that Dad is the head of a crime family; so yeah, he's worried about these people. But also, he's never had gazpacho and misunderstood his father's question.
Gestapo, gazpacho, tomato, tomahto...
Great post, made me giggle.
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Love the misunderstanding in this. :)
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
This was fun! Made me think of Red Dwarf; there's an episode where one of the characters embarrassed themselves by sending the soup back and demanding it be warmed up. ;)
Gazpacho in the summer is like a breath of fresh air. The only bad news-it's good for you what with all the veggies in it.
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